The pie chart shows the percentage of persons arrested in the five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrest. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The pie chart shows the percentage of persons arrested in the five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrest.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The pie charts demonstrate the percentage of
females
and
males
arrested between 1989 and 1994,
whereas
the bar chart shows by gender what they were arrested for and the percentage of arrests for every crime.
Overall
,
males
were arrested more than
females
and public drinking was the most common crime for both genders. It can be seen from the chart that the proportion of
males
arrested was much higher than for
females
. 32% of them were arrested during the given time, compared to 9% for
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. Fellow tended to be arrested for drunk driving more than
females
, at about 25% and slightly under 15%, about twice the time. Theft, breach of order and other reasons were
also
greater for men, with the average percentage being about 20% for men and 10% for women, not including public drinking. On the opposite, girls had a greater rate of arrests for public drinking, assault and no answer.
Females
tended to be arrested for public drinking more than
males
, at above 35%, compared to 30% for
males
.
Also
, approximately 5% of both genders didn't tell why they were arrested.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words females, males with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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