Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement.

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It was late 2017. I was a high school senior. Four of us from the science club developed a raw working model of a Jet Engine for a science fair.
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its fabrication, my role, given my penchant for physics, was specifically to research and build the theoretical model of the engine, and
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make
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assessment of its thrust, which I, in the hindsight, did exceptionally well for a high school student. I
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the fair. We won the People’s Choice Award, and my interest in Aerospace Engineering
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cemented.
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early 2018, I became the National Champion in Nepal Physics Olympiad, and it hugely boosted my confidence to succeed in a demanding undergraduate aerospace curriculum. I graduated with a Bachelor’s Degree in Aerospace Engineering
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August 2023. Throughout my undergraduate, I have been employing traditional
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in my projects, i.e., assigning functions plainly to corresponding
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, and optimizing functions of each subsystem without or weakly coupling them with other
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. May it be
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designing a STOL electric aircraft,
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developing a UAS for RF source localization, or setting up
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tunnel for aerodynamic measurements, I had independently developed all
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each of them was successful in their narrow scope, none of them were cross-
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optimized, and their broader application would have required “repair solutions” which would have been costly or outright unfeasible. Similar differentiation as those of
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goes for my study of engineering disciplines which are involved in the
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and development of flight vehicles.
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analysis of a Scramjet engine, I employed a basic aerodynamic and thermodynamic approach with complete disregard to structure, and/or the interaction between these disciplines.
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, the growing desire for greater performance and efficiency, and the opening of new flight regimes
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interacting multidisciplinary
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-by-analysis approach where we can quantify the aero-thermo-servo-elastic properties at the initial
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I have been exploring
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exciting realm of study, and Professor Emmanuel de Langre’s popular course on Fluids-Solids Interactions has introduced me to its scope and equipped me with the foundations
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and coupling. I was introduced to
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of Florida’s graduate program by Dr S.A.E Miller through his course on turbulence
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. Today, I am applying to UF primarily because of two existing research groups: Dr Miller’s Fluid Dynamics and Turbulence
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Lawrence Ukeiley’s Unsteady Flow Dynamics Group. Their respective theoretical and experimental works on turbulence and its potential
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my research interest
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multidisciplinary interactions between flow and the boundaries in the turbulent regime. I have always committed myself to learning and teaching. My friends call me, ‘guruji’ (mentor, teacher)! I was
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faculty. Perhaps, feedback is the compass for a career, I have always wanted to become a professor. So, I am enthusiastically looking forward to my PhD at UF.
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Your essay does not directly address the statement you were asked to agree or disagree with. Ensure the essay remains focused on the question, providing a clear stance or argument in response to it.
coherence and cohesion
The essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion which directly addresses the prompt. A strong essay should contain these elements to frame the argument and provide a summary of the main points.
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While the essay includes detailed examples from your own experience, they should be used to support a clear argument in relation to the prompt. Keep the focus on illustrating your viewpoint regarding the statement given.

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