Many educators believe that it should be mandatory for all students to wear uniforms. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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institutes
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that students should wear uniforms. I completely agree with Wrong verb form
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statement for two reason
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reasons
first,
economic cause
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causes
secondly
, for a great ralationship
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relationship
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essay will articulate those two
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those two reasons
reason
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the economic
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stylish
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poor individuals a
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apply
clothes
so because of that this
issue of clothes
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become
the
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a
clothes
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them and
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additionally
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the appealing
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the effect
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uniform
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a uniform
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siblings
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without
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costy
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costly
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clothes
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people
student
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students
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wear
same
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the same
clothes
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would be no Correct pronoun usage
there
differences
between them. They might be Fix the agreement mistake
difference
aquire
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acquire
and
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value
comunties
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companies
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, the
society will contain politeness and respect Correct article usage
apply
individuals
.
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wearing
uniform
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a uniform
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