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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart depicts information on the ages of the demography of
Yemen
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 and Italy in 2000 and predictions for a half of century in the period given
Overall
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, the chart
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is separate
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separate
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separated
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 into two categories between
Yemen
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 and Italy with three different ages from young
residents
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 (0-14 years), young to adults (15-59 years), and elderly (60+ years).The number
also
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provide
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provided
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 in percentage. In
the
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apply
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2000,
Yemen
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are
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was
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 mostly near in balance composition in terms of young and young
adult
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residents
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 with 50.1% young people and 46.3% young
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adult
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adults
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 respectively, and 3.6% elderly at the rest. It is opposed to
Italy
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Italy's
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 population which predicted a sixth from the
others
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other
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 age group with 61.6% young
adult
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 citizens. Regarding the projections for 2050,
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similarly
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similarly,
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Yemen
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 and Italy will be
dominating
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dominated
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 by young to
adult
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residents
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 with each of them
are
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being
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 57.3% and 46.2%. But,
for
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apply
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the
others
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other
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 age group look like
contrast
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contrasts
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 with a third
young
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of young
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residents
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 percentage in
Yemen
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, it is
conversely
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 with Italy with most elderly people mostly equal
with
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to
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 young age
residents
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.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words yemen, residents, adult with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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