The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie chart depicts information on the ages of the demography of

Yemen

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and Italy in 2000 and predictions for a half of century in the period given

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, the chart

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separate

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into two categories between

Yemen

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and Italy with three different ages from young

residents

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(0-14 years), young to adults (15-59 years), and elderly (60+ years).The number

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provide

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in percentage. In

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2000,

Yemen

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are

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mostly near in balance composition in terms of young and young

adult

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residents

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with 50.1% young people and 46.3% young

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adult

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respectively, and 3.6% elderly at the rest. It is opposed to

Italy

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Italy's

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population which predicted a sixth from the

others

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age group with 61.6% young

adult

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citizens. Regarding the projections for 2050,

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similarly

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Yemen

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and Italy will be

dominating

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by young to

adult

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residents

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with each of them

are

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57.3% and 46.2%. But,

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the

others

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age group look like

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with a third

young

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of young

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residents

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percentage in

Yemen

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, it is

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with Italy with most elderly people mostly equal

with

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young age

residents

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Vocabulary: Replace the words yemen, residents, adult with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

172 words

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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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