The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

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The given diagram shows the method by which instant noodles are manufactured.

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, the operation can be

devided

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divided

into

einght

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eight

stages, starting with

the

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storing all the raw ingredients

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the silos and finishing with labelling and

sealling

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sealing

selling

the cups. The production begins when the flour to be used for making instant noodles is stored in

a cylindrical towers

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a cylindrical tower

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after being shipped by truck. After that, the flour

is send

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to a mixer,

then

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blended

together with

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a combination of water and oil. Once the dough has been perfectly blended, it

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comes

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come

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comes

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out through the rollers and

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forms

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formed

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into long dough sheets.

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, these sheets are stripped by

factory

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a factory

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machine into separate long pieces

dough

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of dough

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. In the following stage, these strips are moulded into noodle discs which are ready for the deep frying process with coconut oil, and left

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to dry.

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the noodles are

pack

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into different cups

along with

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dry vegetables and secret spices. The process ends with labelling and sealing the packages, so the product will be ready for purchase.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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3 paragraphs

174 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

manufacturing process
mixing ingredients
dough preparation
sheeting
steaming
cutting techniques
dehydration
deep-frying
cooling system
packaging
quality control
production line
mass production
food preservation
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The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

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