The table shows the income and expenditure of Brooklyn Hall, the building used to hire in over the period of three years.

The table shows the income and expenditure of Brooklyn Hall, the building used to hire in over the period of three years.
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The table gives information about the total income and consumption of Brooklyn Hall in each place for 3 years.
Overall
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, the profit of the hall has reduced in each
year
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significantly.
Also
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, the hire of rooms has the main amount of money in the period.
Firstly
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, the hire of rooms had some small drop and rise but it can be considered steady.
In contrast
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,the cafe had a gradual increase.
In addition
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, the funding
of
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for
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council
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the council
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tower was 20000
pounds
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but it dropped to 15000
pound
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pounds
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.
On the other hand
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, funding of bodies had the same situation and it had a fall from 22000 to 20000
pounds
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in the second
year
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and in the third
year
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, it was 7000
pounds
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less than the first
year
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.
Moreover
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, the total income had a steady rise and started at 72000 and ended at 78000
pounds
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.
However
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, the expenditure increased more,
Therefore
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the profit decreased
in
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every
year
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and became 9 times less ( from 9000 to 1000
pounds
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).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, pounds with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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