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The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 people asking if they travelled abroad and why they travelled for the period 1994-98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period.

The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 people asking if they travelled abroad and why they travelled for the period 1994-98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period.
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The given table shows information about the proportion of people in the UK who
visit
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 abroad with purpose,
while
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 the next table depicts their country of destination between the years 1994-1998.
Overall
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, the number of British people visiting other countries appears to have increased gradually from 1994 to 1998. Most visitors
travelled
Wrong verb form
travel
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 abroad for
holiday
Correct article usage
a holiday
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.
Also
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, more than 3000 inhabitants went
forwork
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for work
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 purposes and to
visit
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 their friends and relatives.
Nevertheless
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, there was another reason to
visit
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 foreign countries which were approximately 900 individuals. It is observed that the highest number of foreign visits was for
holiday
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holidays
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 in 1998 and the majority of these visitors went to Western Europe (24,519 individuals).
In addition
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, the British preferred to
visit
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 Western Europe and other regions more than North America.
To sum up
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, referring to both tables, a
huger
Correct word choice
greater
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 amount of British people went to Western Europe for a holiday, for business purposes and to
visit
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 their friends and relatives between 1994-
1998
Correct word choice
and 1998
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words visit with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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