Some people argue that there should be a common punishment for committing a certain crime for all criminals who carry it out. On the other hand, others suggest that the comditions under which the criminal commits a crime should be taken into consideration before deciding the punishment. How far do you agree or disagree with the arguments presented?

In the realm of criminality, there is a perennial debate revolving around whether perpetrators of a certain crime should be punished in
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same way or not. I am inclined to believe that
punishment
must be different
due to
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principle which is manifested in every court. By applying
this
kind of principle, regulators have to apply certain laws based on certain conditions,
such
as motivation and maturity. It could be argued that just act is when courts give different penalties for different
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. In
this
regard, judicial courts and prosecutors should examine what is the motive
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certain criminals and they could give
punishment
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on the motive.
For instance
, there are two
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.
While
the first case took place in terms of
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collision between two cars, the other happened in terms of
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revenge
and it was a well-planned killing. In
this
case, the penalty must be different. The
punishment
for the second case should
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than the first.
However
,
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condition
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such
as
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of
criminal
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criminals
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also
should be
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consideration. In
this
regard, the penalty for
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must be
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with
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punishment
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for
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. Needless to say, youth have a different
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condition as they do not really understand
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the legitimated law and constitution.
Furthermore
, their
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to some
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is under parental
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. Regulators should create certain rules for
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based on age. To take everything into account, I firmly agree with the discussed notion because
that is
a part of justice application in societies. The government should look for two main considerations which are motive and age.
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