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Nowadays, distance-learning have gained in popularity, but some people argue that courses can never be as good as those taken by attending a college or university in person.To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Nowadays since the COVID pandemic, more colleges and universities have adopted distance learning programs to avoid contact to prevent infection of COVID-19.
However
, some people debate that attending college is better than e-learning. I side with the view that
offline
 learning is more valuable. It is well known that
offline
 classes offer fewer distractions as
students
 are away from the internet and gadgets.
However
,
this
 can help
students
 focus better and retain information more effectively. There is no doubt that
offline
 presence can lead to improved social skills and better communication. We are social beings and switching to the online mode of learning can steal
the
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valuable things from life
such
 as friendships, interaction with teachers and society, and learning from each other.
For instance
, face-to-face interaction can help build trust and
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 more connection with people by giving opportunity to showcase their personality.
As a result
, gaining trust and a network will have a big impact
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 the future One thing which is equally important is that hands-on learning
such
 as
sport class
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, laboratory experience, and any other experiential learning cannot be replaced with distance learning. A good case in point is practical study attracts more
students
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 attention in a real atmosphere, so
students
 can understand better. In a nutshell,
offline
 schooling is far more beneficial than the online environment.
This
 type of study promotes
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 to get better focus, learn better, and boost their social skills. As a learner, I believe that online presence can never be as good as attending college or
universities
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 in person.
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