The chart Below gives information about how families in one county spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018.

The chart Below gives information about how families in one county spent their weekly income in 1968 and 2018.
The bar chart illustrates some differences in the amount of money that families spent per week on average between 1968 and 2018.
Overall
, the spending increased dramatically on leisure
whereas
that on food demonstrates the opposite trend.
According to
the graph, there is a striking difference in the expenditure on food and leisure as the former dropped rapidly
while
the latter rose in a drastic way for the 50 years being examined.
For instance
,
the
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food expenditure used to account for 35% of weekly income in 1968, which experienced a rapid decline by half in 2018.
In contrast
, people tended to spend more money on leisure, sharing over 20% of their weekly income in 2018
while
it only accounted for less than 10% in 1968.
Therefore
, people's spending habit alters significantly. Regardless of the major differences that occurred for 50 years, other areas demonstrate less important changes since there are only a few gaps in their spending between 1968 and 2018. In fact, the graphs for fuel and power, clothing and footwear and personal goods in 1968 are slightly higher than those in 2018. To be more precise, people spent only 6% and 4% of their salary on fuel and power respectively. It is
also
interesting that the shares of household goods remained unchanged for 50 years, both of which stood at 8%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Budget allocation
  • Consumer spending
  • Expenditure trends
  • Historical comparison
  • Economic context
  • Inflation adjustments
  • Financial priorities
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spendings
  • Essential necessities
  • Luxury items
  • Technological advancement
  • Income distribution
  • Fiscal habits
  • Societal norms
  • Budgeting differences
  • Monetary trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Spending categories
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