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Two maps show the change of a coastal town, called Pentland, from 1950 to 2007.

Two maps show the change of a coastal town, called Pentland, from 1950 to 2007.
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The rendered set of maps illustrates the changes that have taken the place of a coastal town known as
pentland
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Pentland
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, from 1959 to 2007.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that
number
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a number
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 of facilities
has
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have
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 occurred in the infrastructure of
pentland
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the pentland
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such
 as
sea
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the sea
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is
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being
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 replaced with
yacht
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a yacht
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 marina
as well as
 grassland area
is replace
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being replaced
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 with the facility of houses.
According to
 the given diagram,
in
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on
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 the Western side, there was an industrial area which
is
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was
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 shifted into multi-story car parking
along with
 a small park and
swiming
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swimming
 pool in 2007.
Furthermore
,
number
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a number
the number
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 of shops were constructed beside the roads in all
the
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apply
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directions. Meanwhile,
yacht
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the yacht
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 marina
is
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was
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 formed by
sea
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the sea
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 in 2007. Moving
further
,
in
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on
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 the Eastern side there was a car park which
is
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was
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 shifted to another side of a coastal town.
Also
,
facility
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the facility
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 of cinema has
build
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built
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 in the South direction of a
pentland
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Pentland
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 in 2007.
Apart from
this
, houses
has
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have
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 taken the place of grassland area.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • coastal town
  • layout
  • undeveloped
  • infrastructure
  • landmarks
  • rural
  • significant changes
  • tourist attractions
  • residential areas
  • housing estates
  • tourism-driven economy
  • green spaces
  • beachfront properties
  • coastline
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic growth
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