Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinions?

Music
plays an essential role in our everyday life. We listen
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music
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every day and
even
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sometimes do not realize it. There are many resources where we can listen to
music
. We listen to the radio
while
driving our cars. We turn on the TV and watch movies where
music
influence
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our mind
an
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makes
people’s
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tremble at the fear. For several
reason
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, which I will mention
bellow
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, I believe that
music
is a good way to bring
people
of different cultures and ages together. So
that
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music
is important to humankind. First of all,
music
is one of the best
way
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to relax after
stressful
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day. Many
people
prefer to listen to
music
in the evening.
For example
, I like to
listen
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pop
music
. I
has
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listened
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songs
with
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famous international or national singers. Second of all,
music
often helps
people
to cheer up. Personally, when something is bothering me, I prefer to turn on my radio and listen to some of my favourite songs. It helps me to feel better about everything. Leave my troubles behind and enjoy my life. Nowadays,
people
gather and listen to
music
around a concert. I am sure that many
people
will agree with me on
this
issue.
Finally
,
music
plays an essential role in different ceremonies.
For example
, I think it is rather difficult to imagine a wedding without solemn
music
or the Olympic Games without anthems. In conclusion, I think that
music
is
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unique language, which is understood by everyone all over the planet.
Music
is a great way of bringing
people
of different cultures and ages together.
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task achievement
Ensure you have a clear opinion stated in the introduction and conclusion. Your essay agrees with the statement, but the opinion is not clearly defined in either the introduction or conclusion. Use statements like 'I strongly believe that...' or 'In my opinion...' to clarify your stance.
coherence cohesion
Use a variety of cohesive devices to connect ideas and paragraphs, but avoid overusing them. Transition phrases like 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', and 'Consequently' can help with flow, but make sure each paragraph naturally follows the previous one.
coherence cohesion
Structure your essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each main point should be in its own paragraph. Make sure your introduction includes a thesis statement that outlines the main points you will discuss.
task achievement
Support your main points with specific examples or evidence. General statements like 'music is important to humankind' need to be illustrated with specific, relevant examples to strengthen the argument. Personal anecdotes can be effective, but try to also include examples that have broader cultural or social relevance.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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