Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinions?
Music
plays an essential role in our everyday life. We listen Change preposition
to music
music
every day and Change preposition
to music
even
sometimes do not realize it. There are many resources where we can listen to Rephrase
apply
music
. We listen to the radio while
driving our cars. We turn on the TV and watch movies where music
influence
our mind Change the verb form
influences
an
makes Correct your spelling
and
people’s
tremble at the fear.
For several Change noun form
people
reason
, which I will mention Change to a plural noun
reasons
bellow
, I believe that Correct your spelling
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music
is a good way to bring people
of different cultures and ages together. So that
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apply
music
is important to humankind. First of all, music
is one of the best way
to relax after Change to a plural noun
ways
stressful
day. Many Add an article
a stressful
people
prefer to listen to music
in the evening. For example
, I like to listen
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listen to
music
. I has
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have
listened
songs Add the preposition
listened to
with
famous international or national singers. Second of all, Change preposition
by
music
often helps people
to cheer up.
Personally, when something is bothering me, I prefer to turn on my radio and listen to some of my favourite songs. It helps me to feel better about everything. Leave my troubles behind and enjoy my life. Nowadays, people
gather and listen to music
around a concert. I am sure that many people
will agree with me on this
issue. Finally
, music
plays an essential role in different ceremonies. For example
,
I think it is rather difficult to imagine a wedding without solemn music
or the Olympic Games without anthems.
In conclusion, I think that music
is the
unique language, which is understood by everyone all over the planet. Correct article usage
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Music
is a great way of bringing people
of different cultures and ages together.Submitted by ru.kabiru.biru on
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task achievement
Ensure you have a clear opinion stated in the introduction and conclusion. Your essay agrees with the statement, but the opinion is not clearly defined in either the introduction or conclusion. Use statements like 'I strongly believe that...' or 'In my opinion...' to clarify your stance.
coherence cohesion
Use a variety of cohesive devices to connect ideas and paragraphs, but avoid overusing them. Transition phrases like 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', and 'Consequently' can help with flow, but make sure each paragraph naturally follows the previous one.
coherence cohesion
Structure your essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Each main point should be in its own paragraph. Make sure your introduction includes a thesis statement that outlines the main points you will discuss.
task achievement
Support your main points with specific examples or evidence. General statements like 'music is important to humankind' need to be illustrated with specific, relevant examples to strengthen the argument. Personal anecdotes can be effective, but try to also include examples that have broader cultural or social relevance.
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- Sentence 1 - Background statement
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- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
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- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
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