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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2021. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2021. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The given bar diagram represents the developing countries and their
pollution
level
also
 the bars in the chart differ and illustrate the causes
for
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of
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pollution
. (electricity generation, Transport, Industry)
While
China
produce
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produces
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 nearly 60% of
pollution
 by transport, no other
countries
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country
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 produces like that.
Australia
 produces very
less
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little
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pollution
.
China
 produced industrious
pollution
 nearly two times more than Japan and four times more than
Australia
 Japan managed to have the least
PPM
 amount given in the charts less than one-third of
China
's 60
PPM
 for electricity generation. Japan's
PPM
 levels by transport equals
to
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apply
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the
PPM
level
 of America's electrical and industrial cause.
Australia
's
PPM
level
 is lesser than all other
countries
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countries'
country's
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PPM
level
Fix the agreement mistake
levels
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.
Whereas
, America's transportation factor is nearly as much as
China
's electricity at about 60
PPM
. To summarize, at the bottom of the data
Australia
's whole
pollution
 is less than a third of
China
 which is the biggest polluter with
pollution
 rounding of about 250PPM total.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pollution, level, china, australia, ppm with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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