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The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2021. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2021. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar diagram represents the developing countries and their
pollution
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level
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also
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 the bars in the chart differ and illustrate the causes
for
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of
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pollution
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. (electricity generation, Transport, Industry)
While
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China
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produce
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produces
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 nearly 60% of
pollution
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 by transport, no other
countries
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country
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 produces like that.
Australia
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 produces very
less
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little
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pollution
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.
China
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 produced industrious
pollution
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 nearly two times more than Japan and four times more than
Australia
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 Japan managed to have the least
PPM
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 amount given in the charts less than one-third of
China
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's 60
PPM
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 for electricity generation. Japan's
PPM
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 levels by transport equals
to
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the
PPM
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level
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 of America's electrical and industrial cause.
Australia
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's
PPM
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level
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 is lesser than all other
countries
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countries'
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PPM
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level
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levels
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.
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, America's transportation factor is nearly as much as
China
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's electricity at about 60
PPM
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. To summarize, at the bottom of the data
Australia
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's whole
pollution
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 is less than a third of
China
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 which is the biggest polluter with
pollution
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 rounding of about 250PPM total.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words pollution, level, china, australia, ppm with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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