The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
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individuals aged 65 and over in the USA,
Sweden
and Japan during the 83 years from 1940 and
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till 2040.
Overall
, it can be seen that the proportion of
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aged 65 and over will
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decrease in all countries. In
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1940, the American older people
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higher than
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regions and the proportion
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10%, almost 7% and 5% in
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,
Sweden
and Japan respectively. The rate of aged 65 and over had increased during the 20 years except Japan’s older individuals. Nearly in 1985, the USA and
Sweden
elder people’s rate had decreased until almost 1995. Since 1995, the percentage of the
Sweden
population aged 65 and over peaked up sharply till 2015. It is expected to be doubled and reach nearly 25% in 2040.
In contrast
, the aged population in Japan remained the lowest, which was less than 5% until 2005 and
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to grow and reach the highest point, about 30 percentage, in 2040.
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