The bar chart shows the number of private cars, in millions, of different cities from 1950 to 2000.

The bar chart shows the number of private cars, in millions, of different cities from 1950 to 2000.
The bar graph indicates the number of private
cars
in five cities (London, Beijing, Tokyo, New York
City
, and Los Angeles) from the year 1950 to 2000. There are a number of different trends that can be seen for each
city
over the fifty-year period.
Overall
,
according to
the
chart
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all cities grew significantly in private
cars
until 2000.
However
, with the exception of Tokyo from 1980 faced
with
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a decrease in private
cars
. In London, the number of private automobiles boomed for thirty years and
then
held steady at 3 million private
cars
, from 1980 to 2000 there was no increase in private vehicles. Of all the cities on the chart, Beijing started with few numbers of private
cars
in the 1950’s, but until 2000 Beijing was a steady boost of just over 2.5 million, Tokyo was the only
city
on the chart that had seen a year-to-year decrease in private vehicles. New York
City
and Los Angeles both saw
rise
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massively in the first period of 1950 and both faced steady growth until 2000 but New York has slightly less than private
cars
compared with Los Angeles.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, city with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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