These days the fashion in clothing are constantly changing. Is this affecting Individuals and the environment in a positive or a negative way

Nowadays,
Fashion
is one of the greatest trends and at present
the
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fashion
is
canging
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changing
constantly and
this
trend
is
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an emotional impact on human
being
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beings
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as well as
environment
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the environment
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. It is a hot potato, in
this
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essay, I will
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some
lights
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on both
good
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and bad
side
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. To commence with, Fast
fashion
is
an
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popular
trend
this days
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so, everyone wants to
up-to-date
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with the
trend
.
Consequently
, it gives them
a
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mental satisfaction
as well as
observance.
For example
,
New
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generation always follows
celebraties
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celebrities
as their
fashion
icon and they always try to buy
same
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the same
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cloths
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clothes
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like
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as
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them for which they gain
a
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social respect and find
them
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themselves
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mentally satisfied. On account of that, they
also
gain fame and show off how rich they are.
On the other hand
,
to follow
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up
this
kind of
trends
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there are several drawbacks were found.
Firstly
, a person
have
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to invest a huge
amont
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amount
of money to buy
this
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this cloth
these cloths
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cloths
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clothes
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.
Furthermore
, Fast
fashion
febrics
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fabrics
are not common they are rare so, collecting them is
bit
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challenging an individual
have
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to spend a lot of time
to find
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finding
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the right place
from
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where they can purchase their
desire
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product which is much more expensive
as
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they expected.
Secondly
, It is a kind of poor
compitition
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competition
.
Nevertheless
, to follow the
trend
some folks forget about their
tradion
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tradition
and culture. Sometimes they
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more open dress which might not allowed by their family and society.
For instance
, In social
media
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media,
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some youngsters want to become more famous and
want to
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get more views for that they
ware
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wear
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open
cloths
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clothes
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which
had
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a very bad impact on their personal
life
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lives
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. In conclusion, to be
a
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fashionable is always good and ,
by
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following the
trend
can make a happy life opposite to that it must be in a range do not cross the limit might be a good way to be fashionable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast fashion
  • Sustainable fashion
  • Consumer behavior
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Natural resources
  • Pollution
  • Social media influences
  • Self-esteem
  • Consumerism
  • Creativity
  • Diversity
  • Economic implications
  • Exploitative labor practices
  • Ethical consumption
  • Production practices
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