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The line graph below shows changes in the amount of coffee exported from three countries between 2002 and 2012.

The line graph below shows changes in the amount of coffee exported from three countries between 2002 and 2012.
The line graph illustrates changes in the levels of coffee
exports
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 in three South American countries in the space of a decade,mainly from 2002 to 2012 and is measured in millions of kilograms.
Overall
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,the most significant fact to emerge from the graph is that despite some fluctuations,over the period as a whole the levels of
exports
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 rose in all three countries and
Brazil
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 accounted for the highest rate
at the end
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 of the period. In more detail,
Brazil
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 and
Costa
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Rica
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 produced the most proportion of coffee.They began at a similar level of between 12 and 15
million
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 kilograms in 2002,but,
while
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 the coffee exported from
Brazil
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 increased gradually over the following four years,exchanges from
Costa
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Rica
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 experienced a significant fall to around 7.5
million
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.
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,they bo5h
then
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 followed a similar trend,increasing steadily to 20
million
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 (
Costa
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Rica
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) and 25
million
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 (
Brazil
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).
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,Colombia had a more erratic way of distributing than the other two countries.
Exports
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 stood at
million
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 kilograms per year in 2002,which was lower than
Costa
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Rica
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 or
Brazil
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.They overtook
Costa
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Rica
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 in 2006,with
exports
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 reaching 12
million
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,but there was
then
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 a sharp decrease to 2008 when
exports
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 hit a trough of 2.5
million
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.
Following
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this
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,
exports
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 surged rapidly to finish the period at 15
million
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, brazil, costa, rica, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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