The diagram below show the change that have taken place ar queen mary hospital since its construction in 1960.

The diagram below show the change that have taken place ar queen mary hospital since its construction in 1960.
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The maps illustrate the changes in Queen Mary Hospital in three different years, since it was built in 1960,1980, and
then
2000
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in 2000
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.
Overall
, there is an obvious change in the
west
of the maps,
in contrast
, in the east of the map there is a small change in the periods given. Beginning with the
West
, in the year 1960, there was a farmland
behaind
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behind
the shopping
centre
and
then
they both were replaced with a cancer
centre
, pharmacy in the North
West
, and nursing school
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in South
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South
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the west
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West
in 1980, but in 2000, the cancer
centre
expanded and took the place of the nursing school which is disappeared. Turning to the East, there was not any change in the hospital place in the 3 years .
Similarly
, the car park
where
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it
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was behind the hospital, but in 2000 it became smaller and the nursing school took place between it and the cancer
centre
.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words west, centre with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • initial structure
  • renovations
  • expansions
  • hospital complex
  • infrastructure
  • layout
  • capacity
  • technological advances
  • environmental footprint
  • sustainability practices
  • pedestrian pathways
  • parking facilities
  • medical wards
  • specialist units
  • outpatient services
  • landscaping
  • public transport links
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