The diagram below show the change that have taken place ar queen mary hospital since its construction in 1960.

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The maps illustrate the changes in Queen Mary Hospital in three different years, since it was built in 1960,1980, and

then

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2000

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in 2000

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, there is an obvious change in the

west

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of the maps,

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, in the east of the map there is a small change in the periods given. Beginning with the

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, in the year 1960, there was a farmland

behaind

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behind

the shopping

centre

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and

then

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they both were replaced with a cancer

centre

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, pharmacy in the North

West

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, and nursing school

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in South

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South

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the west

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West

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in 1980, but in 2000, the cancer

centre

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expanded and took the place of the nursing school which is disappeared. Turning to the East, there was not any change in the hospital place in the 3 years .

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, the car park

where

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apply

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was behind the hospital, but in 2000 it became smaller and the nursing school took place between it and the cancer

centre

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words west, centre with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

152 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

initial structure
renovations
expansions
hospital complex
infrastructure
layout
capacity
technological advances
environmental footprint
sustainability practices
pedestrian pathways
parking facilities
medical wards
specialist units
outpatient services
landscaping
public transport links

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