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The advantages of the spread of English as a global language will continue to outweigh its disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the future, the positive effect of the spread of
English
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 as a multinational language will continue to prevail over the negative effects. Personally, I assume, that there are more advantages from that, rather than disadvantages.
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, the main benefit of speaking
English
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 is numerous opportunities in life,
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 as getting an amazing education or well-paid work.
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, many jobs require knowledge of
English
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, either way, you will probably not get the position you want.
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, the whole business section or international relations, which are the most trendy majors at
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universities nowadays, demand an IELTS academic score over 6.5 for foreign students.
On the other hand
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, the cultural stuff,
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 as languages and traditions is lost during the learning of
tongue
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 of a country that was colonized, like the UK.
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,
this
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 particular lingo was imposed by colonizers,
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 it became the most spoken language in the world.
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, Australia had to change its mother tongue to
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,
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 the capture of its country, even though at present, it has its own dialect.
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, there are many pros and cons to
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 trend, but it is obvious, that it will grow in popularity in the coming years. So, I believe, that there is no point in being against
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 situation.

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Word Count

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Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global language
  • lingua franca
  • communication
  • employment opportunities
  • economic growth
  • cultural exchange
  • knowledge sharing
  • education
  • travel
  • linguistic diversity
  • cultural imperialism
  • linguistic imperialism
  • colonization
  • identity
  • language preservation
  • cultural heritage
  • mutual understanding
  • intercultural relationships
  • linguistic barriers
  • disadvantaged communities
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