Some people believe that sport is an essential part of school life for students, while others feel it should be purely optional. Discuss these opposing views and give your own opinion..

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The response provided does not adhere to the specified task of discussing views on sports in school and providing an opinion. It's paramount to address the task directly.
coherence and cohesion
The structure of the essay lacks a clear introduction, body paragraphs discussing the contrasting views, and a conclusion presenting the writer's opinion. A logical structure reflective of this format is critical in IELTS essays.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • integral component
  • promote teamwork
  • healthy lifestyle
  • mandatory
  • talents and interests
  • cognitive functions
  • academic performance
  • stress and anxiety
  • physical constraints
  • medical conditions
  • engagement
  • skills development
  • precedence
  • future opportunities
  • balanced approach
  • individual preferences
  • physical education
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