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The charts below provide the primary reason tourists visited Orange City in two different years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below provide the primary reason tourists visited Orange City in two different years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#reason #tourists #city #two #years #information #features #comparisons
The bar charts provide information on the key
reason
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 that drive
tuourists
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tourists
 to visit Orage City
at
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 periods of two years.
Overall
, it appears the sporting Events
is
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are
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 the
mejor
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major
tourists
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tourist
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 attraction,
while
theater
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 is the less attraction. With regard to the athletic events, the number of
the
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people visiting the city in 2017 was slightly less than 150000 . In 2020
the
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that number had increased to approximately 150000, and
in
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is
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 predicted to rise to more than that.
However
, in 2017 and 2020 the number of
the
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theater attendance was significantly lower than 50000,
whereas
 in predicted to grow to nearly 50000 in 2030.
Bisides
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Besides
, the concert audience in 2017
along with
 2020 was almost 25000.
Netherthe
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Nether the
Neither the
 less, it will rapidly increase to over 100000 in 2030.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provide" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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