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Some people say that schools should teach good behavior to children and introduce them to "right" and "wrong". Parents should not be the only once responsible. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #schools #behavior #children #right #parents
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It is said that educational institutions need to help
parents
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 to
upbringing
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children
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 with the right
life
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 positions, not only
parents
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 responsible for that. In my opinion, schools having appropriate skills and being a major member of
children
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's lives should be an important side in pupil's parenting by collaboration with families.
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 with, teacher shaving appropriate education and having necessary professional skills would be more helpful for
children
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 than some
parents
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 who suffer themselves from the absence of appropriate
behaviour
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 or social
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's skills.
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, some
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 having sad relationships or
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 experience in their past may have not a right
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 assumption and
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 inadvertently transfer their opinion to their
children
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 developing antisocial
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, fairs or
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 a sense of self-doubt.
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, youngsters seek positive attitudes on other sides
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 as from friends, peers or teachers, and if their teachers being mature adults with needed qualifications need to help them with their
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 and explain to them not only math and physics but
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 behave in
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's essentials and values.
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, institution
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 a vital part of a person's development and it is
scools'
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schools
 workers considered to be the
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 family to the young generation.
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, I tend to believe that due to the process of education and
upbringing
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 inextricably linked, it is crucial for the
children
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 that school plays a vital role in
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 by cooperation with the family.
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being a vast piece of growth in the school toddler mostly learn to communicate in society within the school's walls and it is teachers who can observe on the
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-row pupil’s social interaction with peers and could notice some problems in their
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 and help them to develop appropriate
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’s attitudes.
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, neglecting to teach moral values alongside academic concepts in schools is hurting students and causing problems in society.
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, scientists have proven that emotional intelligence is more important than IQ in predicting success. In conclusion, institute
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 an enormous contribution in a student's
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 and being
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 an essential factor in their lives I think that schools should help
parents
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 to grow and develop in a proper way by forming a right
behaviour
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 of the future generation.
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