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The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line graph illustrates how much fast food was eaten by
Australia
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Australian
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 adolescents over a
period
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 of 25 years between 1975 and 2000. Unit
are
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is
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 measured in
number
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a number
the number
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 of times eaten per day.
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, it can clearly be seen that the food with the highest level of
consumption
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 at the
start
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 declined
whereas
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 the other two foods increased throughout the given
period
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.
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,
while
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 the
consumption
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 of fish and chips was the highest at the
start
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, it had been overtaken by hamburgers by the end of the
period
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. In terms of the food with
highest
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the highest
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 level of
consumption
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 at the
start
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, the
consumption
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 of fish and chips stood at exactly 100 in 1975. The
consumption
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then
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 had a moderate drop to just above 80 in 1980 before growing slightly to nearly 100 in the next five years. From
this
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 point onwards, it experienced a drastic decline and hit a trough just below 40 in 2000. Regarding two other foods with lower levels at the
start
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, the
consumption
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 of pizza and hamburger started at around 5 and 10 respectively. The
consumption
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 of pizza
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 experienced a dramatic rise to just above 80 and remained steady in 1995.
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, the
consumption
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 of hamburgers climbed sharply to around 85 and peaked at
pricesely
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precisely
 100.
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, both remained stable by the end of the
period
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, consumption, start with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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