Parents, particularly mothers, do not go to work to take care of family. Some people say that the government should give some money to those parents. do you agree or disagree with the satement? give reasons to your answers and give example to support your views.
In
this
modern era, the term gender equity has become more popular around the world. The purpose of Linking Words
this
is to place Linking Words
women
in as same as men in terms of social status. There is an opinion that Use synonyms
mothers
should not be allowed to Use synonyms
work
to earn Use synonyms
money
for their Use synonyms
families
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However
, others argue that the solution to Linking Words
this
situation is subsiding from the Linking Words
government
to help their needs. I agree that Use synonyms
mothers
should not restricted from Use synonyms
work
in certain conditions and the Use synonyms
government
can allocate Use synonyms
money
to subsidize Use synonyms
women
who are left by their husbands for some reasons that will be outlined in Use synonyms
this
essay.
On the one hand, nowadays, various jobs are suitable for Linking Words
women
so working is not a burden for Use synonyms
women
. Indeed the main role of Use synonyms
women
in the family is fostering and nurturing their children but we live in an era where Use synonyms
work
can be conducted everywhere so Use synonyms
mothers
can Use synonyms
work
from home without ignoring their main jobs as Use synonyms
mothers
. Use synonyms
Also
, when Linking Words
mothers
go to Use synonyms
work
, they can hire a sitter or nanny to handle their chores Use synonyms
thus
they can go to Linking Words
work
to earn Use synonyms
money
to help their Use synonyms
families
in terms of supporting children's education and healthcare, Use synonyms
for instance
. Another point Linking Words
that is
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also
important is today people around the world face expensive costs in each aspect so the mother's role as breadwinner could ease Linking Words
families
burden.
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On the other hand
, the Linking Words
government
as a stakeholder should rule policies to help Use synonyms
mothers
or single parents who are struggling to fulfill their needs. Use synonyms
For instance
, giving some Linking Words
money
or goods to Use synonyms
mothers
who require a subsidy from the Use synonyms
government
. If these policies can be applied to Use synonyms
mothers
or Use synonyms
women
equally, the worsening situation could be combatted. Use synonyms
Also
, the Linking Words
government
should not only provide some Use synonyms
money
but Use synonyms
also
some courses for Linking Words
mothers
to improve their Use synonyms
skills
especially applicable Use synonyms
skills
that can earn Use synonyms
money
easily Use synonyms
such
as digital and computer Linking Words
skills
. Use synonyms
Moreover
, for those who don't continue to higher education Linking Words
thus
they get easy access to employment based on their qualifications and Linking Words
skills
that they have.
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To sum up
, Linking Words
although
allowing parents to Linking Words
work
especially Use synonyms
mothers
has several benefits not only for themself but Use synonyms
also
for their Linking Words
families
, the Use synonyms
government
should apply regulations that support Use synonyms
women
or Use synonyms
mothers
to enjoy their Use synonyms
work
environment and Use synonyms
also
help them in terms of poorer Linking Words
families
.Use synonyms
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