Parents, particularly mothers, do not go to work to take care of family. Some people say that the government should give some money to those parents. do you agree or disagree with the satement? give reasons to your answers and give example to support your views.
In
this
modern era, the term gender equity has become more popular around the world. The purpose of this
is to place women
in as same as men in terms of social status. There is an opinion that mothers
should not be allowed to work
to earn money
for their families
. However
, others argue that the solution to this
situation is subsiding from the government
to help their needs. I agree that mothers
should not restricted from work
in certain conditions and the government
can allocate money
to subsidize women
who are left by their husbands for some reasons that will be outlined in this
essay.
On the one hand, nowadays, various jobs are suitable for women
so working is not a burden for women
. Indeed the main role of women
in the family is fostering and nurturing their children but we live in an era where work
can be conducted everywhere so mothers
can work
from home without ignoring their main jobs as mothers
. Also
, when mothers
go to work
, they can hire a sitter or nanny to handle their chores thus
they can go to work
to earn money
to help their families
in terms of supporting children's education and healthcare, for instance
. Another point that is
also
important is today people around the world face expensive costs in each aspect so the mother's role as breadwinner could ease families
burden.
On the other hand
, the government
as a stakeholder should rule policies to help mothers
or single parents who are struggling to fulfill their needs. For instance
, giving some money
or goods to mothers
who require a subsidy from the government
. If these policies can be applied to mothers
or women
equally, the worsening situation could be combatted. Also
, the government
should not only provide some money
but also
some courses for mothers
to improve their skills
especially applicable skills
that can earn money
easily such
as digital and computer skills
. Moreover
, for those who don't continue to higher education thus
they get easy access to employment based on their qualifications and skills
that they have.
To sum up
, although
allowing parents to work
especially mothers
has several benefits not only for themself but also
for their families
, the government
should apply regulations that support women
or mothers
to enjoy their work
environment and also
help them in terms of poorer families
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