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The number of TV programs is growing day by day .some people say that it is good as it is gives people more choices while other say it affect the quality of TV programs discuss both the views and give your opinion

#tv #programs #people #choices #quality
In recent days, various
TV
programs
 have increased
everyday
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. It is good for
people
 to make
decision
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the decision
a decision
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 to choose what they want to watch. But it can
bring
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effect
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affect
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about
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the quality of
TV
programs
. There will be a deeper investigation
about
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into
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this
. Looking into more detail,
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and have
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have
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having
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 a lot of
choice
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choices
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 can make
people
 have more news or film variations. Multiple variants of choices
cn
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can
 be separated
the
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by the
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 kind of
people
. Every level of humans like children,
teenager
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teenagers
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,
adult
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adults
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 and elders
people
 can be arranged by their needs. It
is
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will give more
information
 that can not
be filter
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be filtered
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because
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because of
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 the amount of
information
 from television.
For example
, there
are
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is
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 a lot of
information
 about
celebrity
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a celebrity
the celebrity
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 that they can watch on
TV
programe
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programmes
.The value
about
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of
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 the news, can not be known by
people
. They can believe the
information
 naturally without
crosscheck
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cross-checking
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 the
information
. The results,
people
 will follow the
information
instead
 the
information
are
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is
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 real or fake.
This
 can make followers wrong in directions. 
On the other hand
,
growing
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the growing
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 of
TV
programs
 can make advantages for citizens.
First,
they can choose
variety
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a variety
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 of
programs
 based on their needs. They can filter which program they want to watch. That means they can
imporved
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improve
improved
 the value of their lives based on their hobbies
for example
.
Second,
the
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apply
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education can be learned everywhere not only at schools. Children can get
information
in
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from
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 every
TV
 program that
bring
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brings
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 news about something new to
learns
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learn
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. In my opinion,
variety
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a variety
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 of
TV
programs
 can make
people
 more intelligent and
learning
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learn
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 everything that can make their
live
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lives
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 better than before. They can
also
 share
the
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apply
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information
to
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with
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 each other
that
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who
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 have
similiar
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similar
concern
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concerns
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. They can discuss based on what their was watched before.
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coherence cohesion
Introduction should clearly present the topic and the writer's position. Conclusion should succinctly summarize the main ideas and personal opinion.
coherence cohesion
Organize ideas logically with clear paragraphs. Use a range of cohesive devices to connect ideas within and across paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Develop main points with more detailed and specific examples. Each paragraph should include clear topic sentences.
task achievement
Ensure you address all parts of the task, providing a balanced discussion of both views and a clear personal opinion.
task achievement
Elaborate on the points you make by providing clear, comprehensive ideas that effectively support your argument.
task achievement
Provide specific examples to support the ideas presented and demonstrate a deeper understanding of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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