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The table below compares the proportion of national expenditures in Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey on the various types of consumer goods in 2002.

The table below compares the proportion of national expenditures in Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey on the various types of consumer goods in 2002.
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The table below compares the proportion of national expenditures in Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey on the various types of
consumer
goods
 in 2002.
In
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overall
, the category of
consumer
goods
 that all
countries
 spent most on was food, drinks tobacco, which was three times higher than on the other types of
consumer
goods
. By the way, the lowest spending could be seen in the category of leisure and education in all five
countries
. The spending for Turkey was generally higher than
other
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the other
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 four
countries
. In terms of food, drinks and tobacco, Turkey spent the most at 32.14%. The expenditure of Ireland was
also
 high compared to Sweden which spent at least. Spain and Italy spent 18% and 16% respectively.
On the other hand
, the lowest expenditure was on leisure and education which accounted for under 5% in all
countries
. Clothing and footwear was the third category of
consumer
goods
 and accounted for those items between 9%
Italy
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 and 5.4% in Sweden. The national
spendings
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 in
this
are
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area
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 for the remaining
countries
 averaged around 6.5%.
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