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The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005.

The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005.
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The line graph illustrates information about three various types of resources which took part in the
air
pollution
 process in the UK over the given 15-
year
 time period, between 1990 and 2005. Units are measured in
million
tonnes
.
Overall
, in terms of atmosphere toxic waste, the industry experienced the highest proportion of
this
 process
while
 households and transport
were
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stayed
at
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below 2
million
tonnes
 of
air
 pollutants given the
15-yearyear
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15-year year
15-year-year
 time zone. Both 3 different types of
air
pollution
 resources declined dramatically from 1990 to 2005
year
, respectively. On the one hand, the amount of
pollution
 by industry resources
was seen
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 a sharp decrease till
the
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1999
year
, with approximately 3
million
tonnes
 of
pollution
. After 6 years,
this
 figure stayed at 4
million
tonnes
 till 2002,
then
 it went down slightly.
On the other hand
, the transport consumption fluctuated in the same range ,
such
 as 1.5 and 2
million
tonnes
 of
air
 pollutants during the whole
year
 period. Turning to household figures, for the first 9 years, the amount of
pollution
 measured in the same stage,
while
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it
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fell to
0.5
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approximately 0.5
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million
tonnes
 of
air
 pollutants, approximately. Following
this
, the total
air
pollution
 accounted for a sharp decrease in terms of
million
tonnes
, over 15
year
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15-year
 period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollution, million, tonnes, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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