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The diagram illustrates black tea manufacturing process using two different methods.

The diagram illustrates black tea manufacturing process using two different methods.
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The diagram illustrates
black
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the black
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tea
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 manufacturing process using two different methods.
Overall
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,
process
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the process
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 is
begining
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beginning
 with picking leaves and culminating with drying. First of all, fresh
tea
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 leaves are picked
which
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with
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 one or two top leaves
for
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apply
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to manufacture better quality
tea
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.
Next,
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fresh leaves are withered on
rack
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a rack
the rack
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 which 60
percent
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per cent
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 of
total
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the total
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 weight moisture out.
In the
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The
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 next
phrase
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phase
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 of manufacturing black
tea
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 used
to
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two
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 2
technique
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techniques
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such
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 as traditional and modern methods. Afterwards ,in traditional methods, dried leaves are rolled flat
then
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 enzymes and oxidation
seperate
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separate
 from it. On the one hand, in
modern
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the modern
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 method, dried leaves are
cutted
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cut
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, turned and curled.
In
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As
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result
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a result
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, fermentation and smaller granular pieces
seperated
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separated
 from machines. In
final
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the final
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 stages, in copper colour leaves are
firing
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fired and
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then
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drying
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dried
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 in
oven
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the oven
an oven
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. As
result
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a result
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, interesting
flavour
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flavours
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 and
aroma
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aromas
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 have
created
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been created
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.
In addition
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, there
are
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is
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 some interesting
point
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points
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 that 97
percent
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per cent
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 of total pieces
moistrue
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moisture
 out to get perfect black
tea
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.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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