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The table below show th number of cars produced im three countries from 2003 to 2009. Sumarize the infomation by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make compairisons where relevant.

The table below show th number of cars produced im three countries from 2003 to 2009. Sumarize the infomation by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make compairisons where relevant.
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The table
give
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gives
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 detailed information about
car
production
 of three various developing
countries
 over 6
years
, between 2003 and 2009.
Overall
, it is clearly apparent that the number of cars produced in Thailand is much higher than
other
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the other
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 2
countries
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countries'
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production
.
Following
this
, the
aoutomobile
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automobile
production
 peaked in 2006, in
the
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a
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 total of 3
countries
 given results. On the one hand,
Thailand
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Thailand's
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manufacter
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manufacturer
manufacture
 industry
accounts
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accounted
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1.162.356
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for 1.162.356
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 units of
car
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the car
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 in 2006
in
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apply
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which were 3.5 times more than
another
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other
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 developing
countries
.
In addition
 to
this
, the
cars
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number of cars
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 produced in Australia declined over 6
years
 and it accounted
at
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for
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 the least number of
car
manufacture
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manufactured
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such
 as 245.264
unit
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units
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. On the
another
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other
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 hand,
the
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with the
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 passing
the
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of the
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years
,
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the manufacterer
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manufacterer
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manufacturer
manufacturers
 of Argentina experienced more
a
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of a
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perchentage
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percentage
 increase
for
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in
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cars rather than
another
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the other
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two
countries
.
Moreover
, total
car
production
 rose dramatically from 2003 to 2006,
then
this
 trend went down over
next
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the next
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 3
years
, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, production, countries, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • car production
  • trends
  • growth
  • decline
  • peak production
  • increase
  • decrease
  • fluctuation
  • volume
  • relative position
  • trend analysis
  • manufacturing output
  • industrial performance
  • year-over-year change
  • comparison
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