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An increasing number of professional such as doctor and teacher are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. what problem does this cause and what are the solutions?

#doctor #teacher #countries #work
Profesional
worker
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workers
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such
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doctor
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doctors
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 and
teacher
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teachers
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 from poorer
countries
 choose to move to developed
countries
has
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increasing
there
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their
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day
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days
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.
This
 essay will examine the cause of a movement
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of profesional
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profesional
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professional
worker
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workers
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 and possible
solution
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solutions
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to
this
problems
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problem
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. The two main
couses
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causes
courses
 of
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an
the
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increasing number of professional
worker
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workers
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 from poor
country
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countries
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 to work in developed
countries
 are low
salary
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salaries
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 and
minim
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minimal
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fasilities
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facilities
. Many
doctor
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doctors
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 or
teacher
worker
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workers
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 in rural areas almost more than one
years
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year
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 without having
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an
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annual
salary
. For
instances
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,
Teacher
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Teachers
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 and
doctor
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doctors
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working in
the
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a
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 village which
very
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is very
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 far from
city
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the city
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 frequently had
wage
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wages
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 so late
while
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that
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 they
have
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had
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 to feed their own days.
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,
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apply
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 working in the distances places sometimes lack of
fasilities
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facilities
 and make
they
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it
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 hard to giving services to society.
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, In
Papua
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Papua,
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 there are many people
still
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who still
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 lack
of
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apply
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knownledge
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knowledge
 because the access
of
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to
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road
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the road
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 are difficult so
make
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teacher
 or
doctor
harden
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are hard
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 to get there. Some possible solutions to
this
problems
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problem
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 are increasing
salary
 and
create
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creating
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 good
fasilities
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facilities
.
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Giving
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 high wages to
profesional
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professional
worker
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workers
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 it
are
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is
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 make them happy and
exciting
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 to
working
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work
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.
However
,
renovation
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renovating
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the infrastucter
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infrastucter
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infrastructure
 and
provided
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providing
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 equipment to support
they
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the
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worker
activies
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activities
and
it
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apply
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make them fill
confertable
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comfortable
on
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with
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 their duty. In
conclution
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conclusion
,
salary
 and
fasilties
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facilities
 are the main problems
to
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for
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doctor
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doctors
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 and
teacher
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teachers
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 in needy
countries
which
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who
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 move to
thrive
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thriving
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countries
.
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their
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them
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 high
salary
 and
provided
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providing
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 good
fasilties
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facilities
it
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apply
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can
overcome
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encourage
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they
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them
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to move to
thrive
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thriving
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counties
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countries
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