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The provided table illustrates the figure of income and allocating on diet and clothes and the pie charts show the spending of allocating by family in a particular city in the United Kingdom between 2010 and 2013. The units are measured by poundsterling.

The provided table illustrates the figure of income and allocating on diet and clothes and the pie charts show the spending of allocating by family in a particular city in the United Kingdom between 2010 and 2013. The units are measured by poundsterling.
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The provided table illustrates the figure
of
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for
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 income and
allocating
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allocation
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 on diet and
clothes
 and the pie charts show the spending
of allocating
Wrong verb form
allocated
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 by
family
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families
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 in a particular city in the United Kingdom between 2010 and 2013. The units are measured by
poundsterling
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pound sterling
.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that
while
 the amount of
family's
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family
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 revenue in the
UK
 experienced a downward trend, they splashed out more money to buy
food
 and
clothes
.
In addition
, more and more
families
 in the
UK
 purchased more dairy products,
food
 and vegetables than
clothes
, meat and fish,
whereas
 only the
budget
 for other
food
 remained until the end of the
period
. Regarding the table of
families
 income and that allocation,
it is clear that
 the average revenue among
families
 in the
UK
 accounted for 29000 in 2010, but
then
 it depicted a decrease to 25000 throughout the given
period
 .
However
, the
budget
 of
families
' consumption
on
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of
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food
 and
clothes
 grew by 1000 from 14000 to 15000. Turning to the figure
of
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for
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 allocating income by
families
 in the
UK
, it is true that more and more
families
 allocated their
budget
 to purchase dairy products, fruit and vegetables which made up only 12% and 26% in the first
period
 to merely 16% and 30%
at the end
 of the
period
, respectively.
Conversely
, the
families
 reduced their
budget
 on
clothes
, meat and fish, which comprised 13% and 23% in 2013,
subsequently
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respectively
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.
Lastly
, the allocation on other
food
 witnessed a remain over the given
period
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words clothes, uk, food, families, budget, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provided" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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