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The pie charts below show how teenagers in Japan and Australia spent their money in 2019.

The pie charts below show how teenagers in Japan and Australia spent their money in 2019.
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The pie chart illustrates the Australian
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teenagers
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 spending in 2019.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
teenagers
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 allocated most of their budget for food,
while
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 books became the least favourable option for them.
To begin
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 with, food shared the highest percentage which accounted for 37%, followed by clothes at 25%.
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, Australian
teenagers
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also
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 spent their money on video and computer things, which
only
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 2% below the clothes.
Therefore
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, it can be seen that there was no
a
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significant gap between the
first-three
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 priorities.
On the contrary
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, books and other
section
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 shared a similar percentage at 8%. Compared to the three other categories, these two options became the least priority among
the
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Australian
teenagers
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words teenagers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spending habits
  • savings
  • electronic goods
  • physical goods
  • cultural differences
  • social media influence
  • advertising impact
  • education expenses
  • priority
  • trends
  • analysis
  • comparison
  • popularity
  • impact
  • expenses
  • categories
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