The graph below shows the changes in the maximum number of Asian elephants between 1997 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The graph above illustrates the estimated numbers of Asian elephants population in nine

asian

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countries from 1997 to 2004. In general, it can be seen that the

mammals

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number of mammals

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were

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unfortunately decreased almost in all

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during that time period. India and Malaysia were the

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with

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dropped percentage,

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Cambodia and Laos showed a positive trend of growth. In 1997, the number of

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lived

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in India recorded

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almost 10000 creatures, but the number dropped

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than 25% to less than 7500 in 2004. The same trend can

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be seen in Malaysia where previously there

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almost 3000 in 1997 and decreased

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70% with only 1000 by the end of the period. Some good trends can be seen

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the growth of the elephants

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in Cambodia and

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Laos. Even though the growth was not that big, it showed that the mammals were able to live well and reproduce in those two countries.

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4 paragraphs

158 words

6.50

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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