The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.  Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.)
The bar charts illustrate the proportion of
computer
ownership
of the residents from 2002 to 2010, by group of
education
for the years 2002 and 2010. Looking from an
overall
perspective, the
percentage
of
computer
ownership
of the population experienced an upward trend over the period, consistent with the
computer
ownership
by
education
level
graph that shows
computer
ownership
ratio increased from 2002 to 2010 and the proportion of
education
level
was directly proportional to the
percentage
of
computer
ownership
level
. The
percentage
of
overall
computer
ownership
rose steadily from above 50% to around 75% from 2002 to 2010.
However
, the increases are different for each
level
of population
education
. There are 3 groups that the
percentage
of
overall
computer
ownership
are at low to medium
level
in 2002, including: no high school diploma, high school graduate, and college (incomplete), which grew significantly until 2010,
while
highly educated groups, including: bachelor’s degree and postgraduate certification, rose moderately.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words computer, ownership, education, percentage, level with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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