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The table below show that the amount of three types of fish farmed in one region between 2008 and 2018

The table below show that the amount of three types of fish farmed in one region between 2008 and 2018
#show #amount #three #fish #region
The table illustrates the amount of three different types of
fish
 in one region , measured in
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million
milion
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million
 tonnes, over a 10-years
period
Overall
 the amount of three types of
fish
 (
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Arctic char
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Arctic-char
,
Salmon
, Rainbow trout ) increased over the inner decade. Rainbow trout showed the
greast
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great
greatest
 increase.
Although
Salmon
 faced the most significant growth by the end of
period
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the period
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 and at the beginning of the
period
Arctic-char
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Arctic char
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 dominated The given
period
 shows that, in 2008 farmed
Arctic-char
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Arctic char
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 stood at 3124. After two years it decreased to 2427. The figure for
this
 reached 4914 million
tones
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tonnes
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 within the six years
at the end
 of the
period
. Another produced
fish
wich
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which
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 was Rainbow trout saw the biggest increase than others. It reached the million mark ( from 6 to 2138 ) in 2016 but
this
 type of
fish
 decreased to 295 in 2018.
Salmon
 increased
similar
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 to other types. The most
popularity
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popular
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 type of
fish
 was
Salmon
 over a decade. It surpassed
Arctic-char
 and it changed upwardly rapidly to 13,445 by the end of the surveyed
period
, a rising tendency from 292 at the commencement.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, period, arctic-char, salmon with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aquaculture
  • sustainable
  • Mariculture
  • inland fisheries
  • artisanal fishing
  • commercial production
  • fish stocks
  • aquatic feed
  • harvest
  • yield
  • freshwater
  • marine
  • brackish
  • cultivated
  • ecosystem
  • biodiversity
  • overfishing
  • conservation
  • ecology
  • aquafarming
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