The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in the are of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts shows how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in the are of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts shows how it was distributed.
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table and pie charts give detailed data on various types of money
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and the distribution of
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budget to the 3 facilities , respectively, in the UK, in 2007 and 2008. The unit was measured in million pounds.
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, it was clearly seen that
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the monetary amount of the
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of the budget increased in 2008 rather than 2007 total figures.
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, the salaries expenses kept their dominant role in both years of
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spending pie. On the one hand, the national government ,which was the major part of budgetary
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, went up slightly by 2.1m
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the income of the local taxes rose sharply by 11.1 m in 2008.
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, the other
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of money experienced the latest place in budget figures.
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the expenditure for staff and officer's salaries declined ,by approximately 6%,
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it was still the highest spending account in 2008 budgetary spending.
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, the amount of expenses for the technology went up 2 times, but building and transport costs stayed in the same range (17%) for the 2
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sources with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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