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Some experts in road safety say that all cyclists should pass a test before riding a bicycle on the public road. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is pointed out by some experts specializing in road safety that one should obtain a license before riding a
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 in public areas.
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 some may argue
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, I believe that passing a
test
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 is necessary because
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 could heighten the awareness of
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rules
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 and lead to
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 reduction in the number of
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 accidents. Some may argue that requiring all cyclists to pass an exam is not necessary, claiming that
bikes
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 are simple to
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. Unlike other vehicles,
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 as private cars and buses,
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 can be used even by children who are as young as three. Considering how simple it is to
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bikes
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, it seems illogical to demand
people
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 study for the
test
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.
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, if
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 measures were to be implemented, some
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 would be deprived of their means of transportation. Studying for the exam and going to a
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 would take weeks, or possibly months.
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 a time-consuming process cannot
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fit in today's busy
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's schedule.
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, I believe that
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 should pass a
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 before riding a
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 to make sure that cyclists are aware of the
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rules
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. Some cyclists do not observe
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rules
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, nor are they aware of them, as riding a
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 has been a part of their
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 ever since they were little. Small children are incapable of understanding
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rules
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 and generally grow into adulthood without learning about them.
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, requiring a
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 license can ensure road safety. As indicated by recent research, nearly 30% of
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traffic
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 accidents can be attributed to inappropriate
use
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 of
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. Those who caused an accident often rode a
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 on a pedestrian street
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 or went against the red light. In conclusion,
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 some
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 argue that
bikes
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 are not as complicated to
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, and
people
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 would possibly lose their way to get around, I firmly believe that making it mandatory to pass an exam to ride a
bike
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 is essential, in order to raise the awareness of
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rules
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 and reduce the number of
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 accidents.
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