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The graph below shows the average years of schooling in four countries from 1900 to 2000.

The graph below shows the average years of schooling in four countries from 1900 to 2000.
This
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 graph shows the average
years
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 that
students
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of
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from
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 The
UK
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, South Korea, Tunisia And Colombia spent in the period between 1900 and 2000.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of schooling
years
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 increased, The
UK
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students
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 spent the longest
years
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 in school throughout the period
while
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 South Korean schooling
years
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 jumped from the shortest length to almost close to the
UK
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. Tunisian
student
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students
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 were less interested during
given
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the given
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 century . In 1900, despite the schooling
years
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were
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being
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 short The
UK
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 had the longest schooling
years
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 which was 2
years
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,
this
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number
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 increased with time to reach 12
years
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 in 2000.
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 ,Colombia had the second-longest schooling
years
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 in 1900 which was 1 year , but it shows no big rise in the
number
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 of
years
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 , which was 4
years
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 in 2000. South Korea and Tunisia had almost no
students
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 interested in school in 1900.
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,
this
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 changed dramatically for South Korea with time to become almost the longest schooling
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years
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year
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 in 2000 which was around 12
years
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.
Although
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Tunesia
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the
number
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 of
years
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students
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 spent in school dropped
on
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in
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 1940 after
small
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a small
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 increase to 1 year in 1920 ,it
experianced
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experienced
 another
raise
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rise
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 in schooling
years
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 to reach just above 2
years
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 .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, students, uk, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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