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Capital punishment is good for countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#punishment #countries
Death penalty is the highest degree of punishment. It is the literal
last
 thing one could do to a man for his wrongs.
While
 some might believe that
this
 might be the right thing to do, I
on the other hand
 believe that
this
 is not a matter to discuss. Capital punishment should not be executed at all. It is wrong from the form of rehabilitation. By executing people at will, We would be neglecting their chance to change as a person and we would damn them straight to the after
life
. Who gives us the right to have
this
 much power over someone's
life
? to be able to end a being's journey just because He could not live up to our standards? One might say It is a good deterent. I hardly disagree. There are other methodes that aren't
this
 morraly ambigues which we could use to face these matters. Death penalty would mean that we as a society failed to pave a road in which the assailant may could have had a better
life
 and succeeded. By taking
this
 path for any given crime, We have decided that we have no faith in our own judicial
system
.
This
 would lead to
further
 increases in crime rate. If we as part of the
system
 do not believe in our own
system
, Why should we expect the person who is commiting
this
 heinous crimes would ever give a chance to our
system
? All and all, I understand the cause behind
this
 type of punishment. But by resorting to
such
 barbaric way of solving our problems, We are not solving them at all. I believe everyone deserves as many chances as
life
 would decide to give them. Everyone should be given the opportunity to change. If someone decides to commit the same crime again, I believe the hihjest degree of charges should be
life
 imprisonment. That way the prisoners would at least have a chance to reflect on their
life
 decisions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • capital punishment
  • death penalty
  • deterrent
  • retributive justice
  • closure
  • wrongful execution
  • morality
  • ethics
  • economic costs
  • death row
  • life imprisonment
  • human rights
  • abolition
  • rehabilitation
  • recidivism
  • heinous crimes
  • judiciary system
  • penal system
  • legal framework
  • justice system
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