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more and more people are taking online courses instead of attending face-to-face classes. what are the advantages and disadvantages of taking an online course.

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In
nowdays
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, the main part of the population
try
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 to
tend
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 involve lessons which it
take
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 place on the Internet rather than attending offline
classes
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firstly
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,
this
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essey
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essay
 will give some potential benefits of online learning studies
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then
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shows
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negative
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 sides of
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 issue.
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, it is
undeniable
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an undeniable
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 fact that technological advancement
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is
vital
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 part of
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modern
societies
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 lifestyle, especially learning tools and improvements.
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, people tend to
icrease
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increase
usage
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the usage
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 of online learning hubs to get beneficial effects which include
cost-benefit
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a cost-benefit
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 approach, saving
times
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time
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 for
another
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other
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 essential
activites
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activities
 and so on.
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, In Azerbaijan,
the
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student
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students
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 who are not eligible for
face-to face
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face-to-face
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 learning use distant learning tools without
leave
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the
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 native
accommodation
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 and
spent
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 only a
little
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small
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 internet fee to access
the
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whole
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resources.
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, the main ageing group of people ,especially students, may
be suffer
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 from some
diffucalties
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difficulties
 of not attending
to
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offline courses
on
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in
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 their
eeducational
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educational
 years.
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this
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, students may
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face
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 some miscommunication problems and not fully
involve
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involved
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in phycisal
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phycisal
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physical
 activities and original view of the
classes
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, as the result of fundamental research
of
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scientist
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scientists
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 investigate that it can be clearly seen that some
of
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students
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the students
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 have
misunderstanding
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at
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their ability to catch some complex
part
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parts
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 of lessons and not to chance to
immagination
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imagination
 of
teories
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theories
.
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,
although
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,
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apply
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online
classes
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 have some potential negative effects on
the
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apply
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communication and problem-solving skills,
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then
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the
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 low cost of the
classes
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time-consuming
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their time-consuming
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is
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are
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 the beneficial side of
this
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 issue.

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coherence cohesion
The essay shows an attempt to organize ideas but there are issues with paragraphing and the logical flow of information. The connection between ideas is weak, which can confuse readers.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, but they are not effective enough. The introduction does not sufficiently outline the points to be discussed, and the conclusion does not effectively summarize the main points made in the essay.
coherence cohesion
Main points are stated, but they lack clear support and development. More detailed explanations and stronger evidence or examples are needed to effectively back up claims.
task achievement
The task has been completed to a certain extent as both advantages and disadvantages have been mentioned; however, the response lacks full development of ideas. The response would benefit from clearer, more comprehensive exploration of the topic.
task achievement
Ideas are articulated but not sufficiently clear or comprehensive. Aim to clarify and expand upon the main ideas to provide a robust discussion on the topic.
task achievement
The use of specific and relevant examples is limited. Developing the essay with more concrete examples would improve the overall task achievement score.

Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • flexibility
  • accessibility
  • cost-effective
  • tuition fees
  • variety
  • remote areas
  • advance in careers
  • interaction
  • networking
  • self-discipline
  • motivation
  • procrastination
  • technical issues
  • unstable internet connection
  • inadequate equipment
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