The diagram below shows the life cycle of the honey bee. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

The diagram below shows the life cycle of the honey bee.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.
This
diagram depicts the life cycle of the honey
bee
which starts from egg to being whole
bee
. It is clear from the diagram that the
bee
undergoes six phases to reach maturity.
According to
what is shown
bee
’s female put about one to two
eggs
each three
days
. After that, the
eggs
get hatched and the little
bee
could
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be seen around 15
days
after the mother lays the
eggs
.
Then
,
and
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apply
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before they have the ability to move nearly, they
passes
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pass
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through two phases of growth which take about 16
days
. Bees become young adults as preparing
step
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steps
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before they
being
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become
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mature and have the ability to put another egg’s generation.
To sum up
, we could say that, bees
takes
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take
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roughly 34 to 36
days
to be able to
laying
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lay
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eggs
and can extract the honey from flowers.
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