You recently bought some train tickets for a journey a week in advance. When you went to the station to catch the train, you were told you could not use the tickets and the staff were very unhelpful to you. Write a letter to the train company. In your letter, describe the problem you had with the tickets say why you were unhappy with the staff suggest what action the train company should take

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction regarding the service which was
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at your train station located near the Breamlea city
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. A week ago, I purchased three tickets online from the official website. I was going from London to Brampton
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my friends. On the day of departure, when I checked the journey passes for verification at the station, the machine showed them as invalid .
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, I tried to reach out to the workers, but they were engaged in other activities. After half an hour of waiting, a member spoke to me aggressively and told me they could not take any action regarding the issue because it was not their fault.
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, we missed our train. I would appreciate
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you could assist me in the matter. I paid around $150 for buying the tickets, which is a large amount of money for me.
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, you can either provide me
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full refund or a free journey to Brampton for us. I am looking forward to your positive consideration. Yours faithfully, Rupinder Kaur.

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For task response: add one more clear detail about why the tickets were not valid, if you know it.
task response
For task response: your request is clear, but you can say more exactly what you want the company to do next.
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For task response: the tone is polite and right for a formal letter.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: the letter has a clear beginning, middle, and end.
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For coherence and cohesion: each paragraph has one main idea.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • disappointed
  • inconvenience
  • frustrated
  • incompetent
  • unhelpful
  • inconsiderate
  • ruined
  • compensation
  • refund
  • apology
  • reimbursement
  • improvement
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