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Your Overseas friend has invited you to visit his country. You are planning to visit him. Write a letter to your friend, In your letter. •Thank him for the invitation & accept the invitation. •Write detail about your visit. •Briefly describe what you want to do there

#friend #visit #country #•thank #invitation #•write #detail
Dear Jee, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I am writing
this
 letter very happy. I got your invitation mail and conformation latter. After
seen
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seeing
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the mail
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mail
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mail,
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 I feel really good.
Firstly
, thank Jee
your
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for your
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 invitation. I accepted your call.I did not have any
expectation
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expectations
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 about visiting your country. But, After your mail came, I changed my plan.
this days
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this day
these days
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 I am ready to come to your home. I
planed
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planned
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 to come after next
week
. Because I have
important
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an important
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 meeting coming
week
. So after finishing that I will come to
UK
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the UK
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.
Furthermore
, I will come to the
UK
 next
week
 Sunday morning flight. Because
,
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apply
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 I think that day you will be free. So I will arrive around evening 6.30. And I want some help from you. I do not know
UK
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a UK
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 town. I have a meeting in
UK
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a UK
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 town. So can you arrange the room in
UK
 city
.
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?
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 If you ok,
then
 let me know before coming
week
. I will see you very soon and I am
waiting
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waiting for
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 your reply dear. Faithfully, Mathu
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph presents a clear and distinct idea or point. The paragraphs in the letter are somewhat disorganized and could be more focused on specific topics.
task achievement
Develop a more suitable and consistent writing tone for a semi-formal letter. The tone in this letter fluctuates and lacks the semi-formal quality appropriate for writing to a friend about a visit.
task achievement
Include specific information and fully develop your ideas. Expand upon the details of your visit and what you intend to do while in your friend's country.
coherence cohesion
Consider adopting a clear organizational structure, starting with a greeting, followed by clear paragraphs for each main point, and ending with a suitable closing.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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