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The chart below shows the average hours spent per day in leisure and sports activities by youngest and oldest populations in the US in 2015.

The chart below shows the average hours spent per day in leisure and sports activities by youngest and oldest populations in the US in 2015.
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The given bar chart describes the average hours of people who , are about 15 - 19 and 76 and over, consumed their each day for different types of leisure and
sport
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sports
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 activities in the year 2015 in the United States of America. Units are measured in hours.
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, it is clear that the oldest and youngest population of the US spent most of their time
on
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watching TV ,
while
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 the former spent
their
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less time on
sport
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sports
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, exercise and relaxation , and the latter
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ones did
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spent
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 it
on
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relaxing and thinking. Looking at the information in more detail , the people who are 75 and
over spent
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overspent
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 nearly 4.5 hours ,which was
most
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the most
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 , on watching TV per day ,
whereas
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 the figures for the
ones
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 who are 15-19 were under 2.5 . As far as the next details are concerned, in terms of three details ,which are Watching TV , Reading, Relaxing ,
thinking
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and thinking
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 , the oldest
ones
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 had the advantage over the youngest
ones
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 .
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, the latter
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ones
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had the advantage over those in terms of socializing , communicating, playing games , doing
sport
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sports
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 exercise and
recreation
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recreational
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 activities.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ones with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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