The chart below shows the average hours spent per day in leisure and sports activities by youngest and oldest populations in the US in 2015.

The chart below shows the average hours spent per day in leisure and sports activities by youngest and  oldest populations in the US in 2015.
The given bar chart describes the average hours of people who , are about 15 - 19 and 76 and over, consumed their each day for different types of leisure and
sport
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activities in the year 2015 in the United States of America. Units are measured in hours.
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, it is clear that the oldest and youngest population of the US spent most of their time
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watching TV ,
while
the former spent
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less time on
sport
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, exercise and relaxation , and the latter
ones did
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it
on
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relaxing and thinking. Looking at the information in more detail , the people who are 75 and
over spent
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nearly 4.5 hours ,which was
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, on watching TV per day ,
whereas
the figures for the
ones
who are 15-19 were under 2.5 . As far as the next details are concerned, in terms of three details ,which are Watching TV , Reading, Relaxing ,
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, the oldest
ones
had the advantage over the youngest
ones
.
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, the latter
ones
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had the advantage over those in terms of socializing , communicating, playing games , doing
sport
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exercise and
recreation
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activities.
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