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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In the modern era, some
people
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 think we have too many opportunities. Nowadays, technology has increased, and
people
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 have updated their knowledge. If we think whatever, we have a lot of
choices
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. I completely agree with
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 statement. The following paragraph will discuss
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, if we select whatever, we will see a lot of
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;
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, if we choose food, milk, dress, and transport, we will see what kind of
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 we have,
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 we will consider price, taste, and model. Most
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 like rich and models, so they will select their best choice. Nowadays, we have many shops. Online choice is going strong. Because of our busy lives, online buying and selling gives us too many
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. These are the benefits of having too many
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. We can buy everything to our ability and our standard.
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, our too many
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 are creating some drawbacks.
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, if we have too many
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, that will leave
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 careless. So
people
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 don’t feel valued. That will affect our future and our kids' future. These days, we have many
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 for everything. So duplicate thinking is increasing.
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 the original price.so
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 will be careful. In conclusion, we have more comparative options, so we can buy quality at an honest price. So
people
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 believe nowadays we have too many
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.
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 true. Because everything and everybody likes a perfect life.
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, if we buy an iPhone, we will go to many shops and search the online website.
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, we will buy the best and most quality phone. That means we have many
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.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure clarity by presenting a more sophisticated structure that includes a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Use topic sentences effectively to overview the main points of each paragraph. Utilize a range of cohesive devices to demonstrate logical sequencing of ideas and connect them throughout the essay.
task achievement
Address the task fully by expanding on your ideas and providing a more balanced viewpoint if agreeing or disagreeing, particularly if the question asks 'to what extent'. Include examples that are more direct and pertinent to the statement in the question, and analyze these examples to demonstrate their relevance to the argument made.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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