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The charts illustrate the number of people who were affected by four types of noise pollution in day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007.

The charts illustrate the number of people who were affected by four types of noise pollution in day and night in cities and rural areas in 2007.
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 bar graphs provided reveals a sharp comparison of the volume of dwellers impacted by 4 categories of noise pollution namely traffic, train, aircraft and industry between
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the city and rural areas, measured in
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, in 2007.
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, traffic-related contaminations took up the most remarkable proportions of both charts
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 all days and
nights
. In terms of the amount of four pollutants in the metropolis cities, the amount of waste from traffic was the main determinant that contributed to environmental matters
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 all days and
nights
 with 64 and 68 respectively.
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, that from train and aircraft constituted 10 and 8,
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 4 and 1 equivalently. In
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stark contrast, there was the most insignificant figure witnessed in the industrial contaminant, to be more specific with 1 in the mornings and 0,25
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nights
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. As for the volume of all types of dusty waste in the suburb, the most alarming proportion was taken up by the amount of pollutants released from traffic with 33 and 24
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days and
nights
 respectively. At the opposite end of the scales, there was no response detecting any emergence of that from industry. Whilst, those of the remaining namely train and
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 contaminants.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nights with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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