Living in large cities today poses many problems for people. What are these problems? Should governments encourage more people to live in smaller towns?
More and more
people
live in cities
today than at any point in the past and this
trend will likely continue in the future. This
has resulted in many problems including extreme overcrowding and governments should take measures to make living outside cities
more attractive.
There are a wide range of drawbacks associated with the rise of modern cities
but one of the most obvious issues is related to population density. The large number of people
crammed into a relatively small area has caused expensive housing, increased traffic and severe pollution. For example
, apartment prices in mega-cities
like Tokyo and New York have soared to the point where only the wealthiest inhabitants can afford decent living standards. Regardless of financial status, all city dwellers have to deal with more and more traffic jams as the population increases while
the area of cities
remains fixed. Finally
, all these people
living and travelling in one place puts a tremendous strain on the environment and some cities
, like Beijing in China, have become dangerously polluted.
In my opinion, governments have a duty to encourage citizens to move to more rural areas. If cities
continue to expand unabated then
the above problems will only get worse. We might one day find ourselves living in densely packed, heavily polluted cities
that resemble scenes from a dystopian science fiction film. In order to prevent this
from happening, the government can give tax breaks to companies that choose to locate offices and production facilities outside the city. This
will provide more jobs for people
who are willing to live in the countryside.
In conclusion, the concerns related to overcrowding in cities
can and should be somewhat countered by governments incentivising living in rural areas. If this
is done then
we may still face problems related to cities
in the future, but at least they will not be as serious.Submitted by tamaracheroki on
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