The charts below show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the year 1990,2000 and 2010.

The charts below show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the year 1990,2000 and 2010.
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below indicates degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1990, 2000 and 2010.
It is clear that
most
students
are studying at Computer Science
faculty
.
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, the overwhelming majority of those granted
students
in 2010
studying
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in Computer Science in comparison with
students
with another popular
faculty
of medicine. The figures were 45 per
cent
and
twenty five
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per
cent
respectively.
Furthermore
, only 10 per
cent
of
student
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studying
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at the
faculty
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of Law,
whereas
the
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they
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are three times more medical
students
. Meanwhile, for the medicine
faculty
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the pattern appears to be slightly different, between 25 and thirty per
cent
. In 1990 the most
spreaded
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students
were the humanitarian
faculty
(45 per
cent
), but out of
this
only fifteen
percent
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were the student of law, which is
the
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on six of all
students
.
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