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The charts below show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the year 1990,2000 and 2010.

The charts below show degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the year 1990,2000 and 2010.
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 below indicates degrees granted in different fields at the National University in the years 1990, 2000 and 2010.
It is clear that
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students
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 are studying at Computer Science
faculty
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.
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, the overwhelming majority of those granted
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 in 2010
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 in Computer Science in comparison with
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 with another popular
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 of medicine. The figures were 45 per
cent
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 and
twenty five
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 per
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 respectively.
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, only 10 per
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 of
student
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studying
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 at the
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faculty
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 of Law,
whereas
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 are three times more medical
students
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. Meanwhile, for the medicine
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faculty
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 the pattern appears to be slightly different, between 25 and thirty per
cent
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. In 1990 the most
spreaded
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students
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 were the humanitarian
faculty
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(45 per
cent
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), but out of
this
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 only fifteen
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 were the student of law, which is
the
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on six of all
students
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, faculty, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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