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The chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.

The chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year.
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The bar diagram illustrates estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the
last
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 year.
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, it is undoubtful that females have more illiteracy than males in any region of the whole diagram.
It is clear that
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 developed countries
haven't
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such
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 a big gap between genders, meanwhile, Asian countries percentage have a big amount
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per
cent
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. The most noticeable thing shows South
Asia
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 with women's percentage more than half and men's with definitely
one third
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 of illiteracy illustration.
Subsequently
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 Arab States
as
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similar to Sub-Saharan Africa have almost half per
cent
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 of unknowledge among females and 30 per
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 among males.
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, the percentage of East
Asia
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 with 20 per
cent
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 among women and 8 per
cent
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 among men is normal compared with South
Asia
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.
As well as
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 Latin America which hasn't significant difference around genders estimated
12
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 and 10 per
cent
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 for women and men respectively. In conclusion, it is undeniable that developed countries well developed and
Asia
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 and Africa continents have to improve their knowledge.

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