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The maps show the developments which took place in the bookstore between 2000 and now.

The maps show the developments which took place in the bookstore between 2000 and now.
The provided maps compare the location of a bookshop in the past and in the current period.
According to
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 the given data, a considerable number of improvements have been implemented and will be discussed
further
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 in the below lines.
Overall
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, after looking at the modifications and improvements, it can be plainly viewed that these are for the well-being of readers as more facilities have been developed to accommodate their needs. In the beginning, a number of facilities
such
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 as art, cookery, and hobbies
have been
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were
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 moved to the fiction area to the southern part of that store
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 their original places
have been
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were
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 converted into an area with multiple tables and chairs in the centre of that store.
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, a new cafe has been built in the southern part of the bookstore.
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, it is worth noticing that the new books sector ,
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, the travel sector remains at the same locations without any change.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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